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Oct 04, 2008 04:45 pm
Edited : Oct 20, 2008 03:39 pm |
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i wake up,
and i put on my make up,
this shit is boring me,
i want to know,
but by now i see,
everything is killing me,
today is here,
yet i'm over there,
where everyone one sees the same thing,
greatests goods,
i misunderstood,
gods gift and treasured plans,
the tree over there,
the clouds in the air,
are all pissing down on me,
my time is running,
but i'm still standing,
far from where i should be,
paint in my hair,
did i even care,
when he told me he loves me,
dry finger tips,
cracks in my lips,
to express my sickness,
pink is the way,
they told me to stay,
black is the boundry,
i crossed the line,
my darkest of mind,
i choose a devil's ryme.
so posed in what i chose,
but whoes to say,
i won't cut you loose,
stay away,
i'm made to break,
anything.
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thank you everyone for your comments, but please don't be scared to be a critic :), this will be my poetry thread, some of them are drunk poems, and some of them, like this one below are not.
"Lady Miss. Grey"
Its a big fucking thrill burning numbers on the door,
Its a big fucking thrill leaving bodies on the floor,
She's not sane but she did it anyway,
A mind makes up,
For anything,
Show that smile,
The one in denile,
The one that wanted,
The girl worth while,
A man in shame,
Standing far away,
He should have whatched,
For lady Miss. Grey,
She storms around,
A thundering cloud,
Your self doubt,
Is what she throws around,
The self-fish and proud,
Is what its all about,
When lady Miss.Grey,
Makes her daily rout,
Give her a wink,
She'll only make you think,
What its like,
When your liver's in a sink,
Its a big fucking thrill leaving bodies on the floor,
Its such a big fucking thrill burning numbers on the door. |
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| Oct 04, 2008 07:27 pm |
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| I tend to like poems with a twist in the end. Neat one. |
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| Oct 07, 2008 11:19 pm |
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| hmm verry interesting i see were you are going most likely hmm i have been there myself |
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| Oct 14, 2008 09:38 am |
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| ** claps hands** very good quite impressive |
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| Oct 16, 2008 04:32 pm |
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| Oct 20, 2008 08:27 am |
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| very good... and i though i was good with words... |
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| Oct 20, 2008 03:37 pm |
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