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| Jan 14, 2007 11:23 am |
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But this isn't about MGH...and for some reason I keep typing MGF and having to correct myself...don't ask why...
My Gothic...Flower? Lol.
Anyway, the thing is I've been writing this sci-fi/fantasy story for roughly two years. It pretty much is my crowning achievement as a writer and has become one of the major portals of escape from the shitstorms that wallow through my house every time my parents start fighting, which is about as often as Britney Spears has a new husband. Heheheh....
Anyway, the story is, currently, 336 pages, and it's not even finished yet. When it does finish, I intend to publish it. Hence, I need someone....or someones...to go over the story, or at least part of it, and tell me what they think. I copy-pasted and deleted and rewrote a lot of stuff, so a bunch of plots might suddenly end or make no sense, as I'll delete a character or an event and then refer to it a few pages later.
So, bottom line, I need some kids to help me out, just read the thing and tell me what you think, let me know if I screwed up somewhere, it's already been copyrighted so there's no sense in stealing it (yes, I'm paranoid), if you wanna add stuff, feel free to, just let me know.
Thanks, kids! Semper Fi! |
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| Jan 15, 2007 03:06 am |
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| Jan 15, 2007 04:23 am |
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| tell me what it's about and maybe I'll read it too :DD |
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| Jan 15, 2007 06:05 am |
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| testing my Online/Offline image status here |
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Jan 15, 2007 10:55 am
Edited : Jan 15, 2007 11:00 am |
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Essentially, it's about this war that's been going on between humans and these militaristic, empirical aliens for 75 years. So far it's been a statemate, until the aliens developed this new weapon that turns the tide for them.
It's also worth noting that while we are pretty formidable ourselves in the year 2831, the Zephalar Inthalion, or "Imperium of Blood, Death, and Destruction" is the most powerful force in the known galaxy, in space and on the ground.
The Terrans start losing battle after battle and planet after planet, but the aliens lose some of their resource centers back home due to uprisings and rebellions so they soon run out of fuel and cannot make the final jump to Earth. They decide to invade, not destroy, a human planet and conquer its resources.
Following a huge space battle, the aliens--Zephalarians, as they are called--make landfall on the planet and immediately start kicking the human's asses. But the best part of all is right when they're about to win, a new army comprised of female Zephalarians, whom the males brutalized and tortured for centuries, launches surprise invasion of the planet and, siding with us humans, gives us a fighting chance for victory.
That's about all I can say without giving any more stuff away. Needless to say, this story is all about the girls, as both women and female Zephalarians pretty much save the day on numerous occasions.
It's sci-fi but has some other elements added to it. If you're still interested, lemme know, I'll IM or email it to you. |
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| Jan 16, 2007 04:41 am |
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| Jan 16, 2007 08:07 am |
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| Awesome. Let me know when you want it and I'll IM or email it to you. |
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